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as I lay me
down to sleep
I lost the faith
that ran so deep
the happy days
and smiles too
that were brought
to me from you
I pray for someone
to save my day
heal my body
and we'll fly away
cleanse my soul
and patch up my heart
as my mind
is torn apart
I ask forgiveness
for all I've done
I've hurt so many
all I want is one
one person to care
wipe away my tears
hold my hand
diminish all fears
take me away
from this hell I'm in
this wretched life
of pain and sin
hiding my face
and the tears I cry
if you don't come
I know I'll die
so come to me
and hold me close
you're the one
I wish for most
©2004-2009 ~MakiTriakor
:iconmakitriakor:

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um...i miss my johnny

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:iconvictonia:
:hug: Aww things will be ok.
The rhyme in this is great and even though the line structure is short, the tone is still lonely. I think this is a very reflective poem and your feelings are expressed brilliantly in this piece.

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It's not the chances we take, but the choices we make which determines our destiny.

"When you're lonely you write, when you have friends you make a band" Manson

:blackrose: Vixi :blackrose:
:iconrosefairy443:
this is really really good. it reminds me of the times mccane didnt ever talk to me and i had HUGE feelings for him. i prolly cant relate cuz well...mccane is here...john isnt...but i can try. i really like the rhyming of this poem. very nice.

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~*~Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear~*~

"It's a good thing most people bleed on the inside or this would really be a gory, blood-smeared earth"
~Go Ask Alice
:iconmakitriakor:
you can relate just fine, dont worry bout it. glad you liked this. :hug:s

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~*~why is it okay for love to be the reason you live, but so very wrong to be the reason you die~*~

...For Never Was A Story Of More Woe Than This Of Juliet And Her Romeo...

ask me how many times my heart has been broken and i will tell you to look in the sky and count the stars

LOVE + PAIN = LIFE
:iconmakitriakor:
thank ya babe

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~*~why is it okay for love to be the reason you live, but so very wrong to be the reason you die~*~

...For Never Was A Story Of More Woe Than This Of Juliet And Her Romeo...

ask me how many times my heart has been broken and i will tell you to look in the sky and count the stars

LOVE + PAIN = LIFE
:iconqueenmeshi:
:hug: :hug: :hug: makes me miss him, too...and i didn't even know him.

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"All stories teach us something, and promise us something, whether they're true or invented, legend or fact," — Stewart O'Nan
:iconmakitriakor:
woohoo!! yes! :hug:

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~*~why is it okay for love to be the reason you live, but so very wrong to be the reason you die~*~

...For Never Was A Story Of More Woe Than This Of Juliet And Her Romeo...

ask me how many times my heart has been broken and i will tell you to look in the sky and count the stars

LOVE + PAIN = LIFE
:iconjuggalostl:
sigh... all i wanted was for someone to feel that way about me, but well... i guess i will keep looking... theres gotta be someone out there for me... but yea, really uber good poem

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If you wanna find out what's behind these cold eyes,
You'll just have to claw your way through this disguise.
:icondeadlypoison695:
whoa... wow... i love it! :+fav:

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:blackrose:
Can't you see that sometimes I need to be bothered? That sometimes I push you away, hoping that you'll care enough to come back and try again?
:blackrose:
:iconmakitriakor:
thanx babe. for the fav and watch

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~*~why is it okay for love to be the reason you live, but so very wrong to be the reason you die~*~

...For Never Was A Story Of More Woe Than This Of Juliet And Her Romeo...

ask me how many times my heart has been broken and i will tell you to look in the sky and count the stars

LOVE + PAIN = LIFE

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